Beata Academy
Would you like to react to this message? Create an account in a few clicks or log in to continue.



 
HomePortalLatest imagesSearchRegisterLog in
Rumors of a List are beginning to circle around the school... A list of what...?
I love you, Pillow ♥
Ebony was here.
Do you have any ideas for future events? Tell us!
You looked so beautiful.

Beata Academy :: Character Creation :: Accepted Applications :: Bin
 

 Ruzard, Jessica M

Go down 
3 posters
AuthorMessage
Cricket

Cricket


Posts : 465
Beata Bucks : 10907
Join date : 2014-05-12
Location : Candy Mountain

Ruzard, Jessica M Empty
PostSubject: Ruzard, Jessica M   Ruzard, Jessica M EmptySun May 18, 2014 10:42 pm
General Information File

Ruzard, Jessica M 730323995_772520


Name: Jessica Mize Ruzard

D.O.B.: 09/06/2018 - 15

Height:5'3

Weight:116

Natural hair color: Blonde

Eye color: blue

Mailing Address: 491 Strew Avenue --  12345

Telephone Number: 555-418-9264

Social Security No.: 1234567890

Family Average Yearly Income: 195,000

Mother's Name:Samantha Greene Ruzard

Father's Name:Dom Blaine Ruzard

Siblings Attending the School: none yet

Brief Description of Gifts: Arachnid Transformation - She can transform into a large human sized spider. In her transformation, she can't control herself. If she turns into an arachnid, and back into a human, she can develop migraines, and stomach pains. At times, she has puked blood.



Last edited by Cricket on Tue May 20, 2014 10:10 pm; edited 1 time in total
Back to top Go down
Lilac
Admin
Lilac


Posts : 695
Beata Bucks : 11881
Join date : 2013-01-07
Age : 1008

Ruzard, Jessica M Empty
PostSubject: Re: Ruzard, Jessica M   Ruzard, Jessica M EmptyMon May 19, 2014 5:08 pm
Pending

Please make the appropriate edits before continuing and notify the staff member once it is ready for review.




Hello! For the most part everything looks to be filled out and going smoothly. However I am not able to approve this creation because of a major detail and a small one because I am very picky.
-First thing is going to be a super easy fix, the DOB needs to be changed as this takes place in the year 2034. This means that if your character was born in 1998, they'd be 35, not 15.
-Second thing, and this is kind of a biggie. Your gift isn't acceptable. Invulnerability, while totally awesome, is not an acceptable gift. It would be WAY too easy for a gift such as this to be taken advantage of and because of that I cannot approve it.

Please look to change these things and if you have any questions just PM me!
Back to top Go down
Cricket

Cricket


Posts : 465
Beata Bucks : 10907
Join date : 2014-05-12
Location : Candy Mountain

Ruzard, Jessica M Empty
PostSubject: Re: Ruzard, Jessica M   Ruzard, Jessica M EmptyTue May 20, 2014 10:11 pm
mmmm, better?
Back to top Go down
Sleepy
Bottom Pillow
Sleepy


Posts : 3802
Beata Bucks : 12988
Join date : 2013-03-14
Age : 25
Location : Fire's Pants/Seattle, WA

Ruzard, Jessica M Empty
PostSubject: Re: Ruzard, Jessica M   Ruzard, Jessica M EmptyTue May 20, 2014 11:21 pm
Accepted

Congratulations and welcome to Beata.
Back to top Go down
Sponsored content





Ruzard, Jessica M Empty
PostSubject: Re: Ruzard, Jessica M   Ruzard, Jessica M Empty
Back to top Go down
 
Ruzard, Jessica M
Back to top 
Page 1 of 1
 Similar topics
-
» Jessica's test

Permissions in this forum:You cannot reply to topics in this forum
Beata Academy :: Character Creation :: Accepted Applications :: Bin-
Jump to: